IF Comp: Dull Grey
Okay, so the title is very off-putting. Gonna play it anyway.
I’m enjoying the simple but layered visuals, even if they don’t technically count towards my score (it’s all about the words). But it shows the writer has spent time on making an involving and professional story. Mostly, in my mind, because it means they’ve ironed out a higher number of bugs.
This took me ten minutes to play through once. I could tell it was translated into English because some of the phrasing was just unusual (not quite wrong but not quite right) and some mistakes had gotten through too. Quite a few… but it still felt like a well-written story that just needed one or two more drafts from native English speakers.
It is, as the name suggests, a somewhat depressing story. Which is fine. I made the same choice over and over, and that got me a fairly common ending. I gather than changing one’s mind can change the ending, but I don’t like the story enough to play a second time (only because of personal taste, not because the story is bad).
As I said, the writing is genuinely good throughout. I’m going to give it 4 stars despite the errors, because I respect the effort of translation done well. Some of the errors add to the atmosphere, actually.
Felicity Banks 
Captain Person (@captainperson) said,
October 12, 2019 at 7:59 am
You get the good ending by
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Doing what the navigator tells you and taking your time before you make your choice
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Waiting until instead of Mom deciding for you, an option for you speaking up for yourself appears.
Felicity Banks said,
October 13, 2019 at 11:51 am
Thank you!